Nowadays some parents tend to take on everything for their children. For example, they do all the chores; schedule their kids’ studies and activities. Unfortunately, it doesn’t help children to become independent. (32字)
To help their children to be independent, here are three tips for parents. First, parents should give their children more responsibility and decision-making power. Second, encourage kids to try things themselves first. Parents should teach them how to do the task rather than doing it for them. Third, parents teach kids to solve their own disputes. Encourage children to work out issues themselves, only if the problem is very difficult to deal with. (74字)
There is no single way to help children become independent. However, as long as parents follow the advice mentioned above, it’s not hard to raise children to become independent adults.(31字)
作为错误比较集中的几点:1,nowdays单词拼写错误,正确为nowadays.2,注意段落安排,用三段式结构,每一个段落使用句子个数为3-5-3或者3-6-3结构,一共11-12句话说完全部内容。3,themself.单词拼写错误,正确为themselves。4,不要用绝对用语,只有想信我,只要相信我就一定….怎么怎么样。5,书写一定要注意书面整洁,不要有涂改,每一个涂改都要扣分的。